I left a massive comment, and I hope it's helpful and not repetitive or bitchy or anything. There was a lot of stuff I liked, so I made sure to point everything out!
I wanted to ask your preference: I have two different drabbles that are fanfic but that doesn't effect the reading of them that I wanted feedback for as well as a Jacob Black fanfic that isn't considered a "stand-alone" I guess - like you'd need to be, well, a fan.