Can I ask you all a favour? (story related)

Well, I wrote this short story (well It's only one chapter) and I quite like it. The problem is I don't know whether to continue with it or not? So I was just wondering if some people could help me by checking it out and give me feedback about what they like and don't like about it and whether you think I should continue.

Here is the description.
When you're famliy slowly tears apart, where do you go?

Megan is having troubles, handling her family, no one cares and no one notices her except her brother, but for how long?

If you could do this the would be great and your feedback would be very much appreciated!
October 23rd, 2009 at 12:01am