READ THIS!!!! (Living without his arms (whoring))

Okay so a thank you Is needed for the 13 people who read my other journal.
And a big thanks to the ONE of the people that went on to read my story.

I'm really looking for some help on it.
1. Do I need more detail?
2. is there too much?
3.Do my characters talk too much?

Come on people a little help?

4. Should I even be bothered trying to get it out there? Does anyone really care or am I ranting to myself.

Please. Look at it and subscribe if u like and comment. And comment if you don't. I wanna know why!!!!

Please come on.
!!!!
I'm begging here. Okay not literally I'm ranting and whoring.