Blog Request, Story Review♥

This is a blog request, I read stories and blog about them so they are more recognized and get more feedback.

The author of this One Direction fan fic is, MissSpitFire

> Curiousity <

I really enjoyed reading this!

You could use a little help on grammar. With your commas and such. It might help you to re-read and go through every chapter you post at least a couple times. I have to, and sometimes I'll still have mistakes. Here, I will give you an example,

With fingers like stone she fumbled with buttons on her jacket trying to pry the material from her body but the feeling in her feet was disappearing rapidly and the numbness of her fingers made it hard to push the small button out of the hole.

That one sentence could be turned into at least three.

With fingers like stone, she fumbled with the buttons on her jacket. Trying to pry the stubborn material from her body. But the feeling in her feet was disappearing rapidly, and the numbness of her fingers made it hard to push the small button free.

But as far as your writing style? Its entertaining♥.

I love how sweet Harry rescues her! Interesting plot. And you seem so familiar with your readers, including their names in your authors note. Very nice!

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To any One Direction fans, or just anyone who loves a good story? I definitely recommend. It is such a cute, lovable fan fiction. Comment, subscribe if you'd like. Let her know your opinions. I know some are much more different then mine! (;

Here is the link:

Curiousity.

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