Comment Swap!

I really want opinions on this story so I want to do a comment swap!

The rules are:

You MUST comment first
Link me the story you want me to comment on
You get what you give!

:D

It's pretty much just me wanting to tell you fellow Mibbians that me and my friend, Jess have rewritten and redesigned our old story Fate of the Angels and I was hoping you'd take a read and give us your thoughts on it so far!

The link is: Vita Mortem

Pretty much it's been a three year work in progress but since our writing has changed so drastically we decided that it needed to have a new story in it's own right because though it may be a vaguely similar plot the ideas are different!

Ps: Brownie points to whoever can guess what's going to happen plot-wise :D