Can I Have Your Attention?

I started a new story based on the show "Dominion", I have placed it in a contest. But regardless of that I would love to know what you think about it. I would really love some constructive criticism, so far there are only two chapters, the prologue and the first chapter. Yes I know there are errors, no one is perfect. But if you feel the need to remind me that is perfectly fine, please don't hold back because I would love to know your opinion. I don't judge and my feelings don't get hurt easily.

Honestly, I can't say that highly doubt people wont do it because there have been a few that have done comment swaps with me. This is not me asking for free comments, this is me asking for constructive Crit. Something that can help me in my writing and it will be from different people so I will get different views. If you do want a comment back on something, let me know and I WILL comment back.

Light Of Legend

Please -look I'm begging- can you help me out?

Look at this sexy face!
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July 30th, 2014 at 01:40am