A Request to My Friends, Comment Swap

So a lot of my original fiction is straight forward fantasy but recently I started experimenting with something new. This new thing I'm writing is a Greek fantasy romance genre story.

I want to ask my friends and mibba in general's opinion on it. So I'm offering a comment swap, 200 words at least and not a single mention of the banner or layout in the first 200 words, that was one of the things I hated the most about the old comment swap feature.

I do have a few stipulations:
-you comment first
-please no One Direction or boy band stuff so help me god
-honest opinions about the story, plot, characters.
-that means, grammar can be mentioned but I don't want 200 words of proofreading, that's not what I'm aiming at by doing this.

Comment here the story you would like me to read and then comment on the story. here -> The Story

ALSO IT IS AROUND 5000 WORDs, it was 16 pages in word so it is kind of long, just so you guys know what you're getting yourselves into.

Thanks guys!!!
September 26th, 2014 at 08:46pm