Edited Poems Switched Back to Originals. Much Better.

The last 3 poems I posted have been converted back to their original versions as freestyles. I've realized how bad the originals are so I figured I'd shove those down your throat instead. By the way, if you smoke creativity and dive into the deep blue then its best to get VERY inside-out before reading my poetry so its easier to feel the intent. My poetry can be very heavy and usually requires assistance to fully comprehend. Though, I'm not saying its good, by any means, but it does have a very wholesome meaning and emotion behind it if you can fully grasp the intention. Feedback is nice, but I prefer honesty, so criticize me. Put me on a raft and send me to Atlantis. Try to find it in your heart to feel mine and let the words flow through you. That's all I ask for as an artist. I play hard guitar riffs. See me in the back stage playing for retard kids. I spark this like hard lips, lodge in the bong rips. Start it, sparring wits with the largest armor lid. You can't phase me. Your time's out, I'm crazy. Tie me down and r-
Or play the game, sustaining.
What?
I guess I'm done.
I'm too lazy to continue on, but this was fun.
November 23rd, 2014 at 08:01am