Read please

okay so i wrote the first two paragraphs of a story. tell me what you think:

(oh and it is kinda Harry Potter with the ship of Ron and Hermione so yeah)

I walked silently as the air stalked me. I quickly glanced behind my shoulder, watching my surroundings. Then, I stopped. I heard the bushed twitch as I looked to my left. I was scared, beyond scared, I was terrified what my fate would come to.
I felt my pocket for my wand. It was there. Slowly, I continued walking. My bushy brown hair was wet with sweat. I could feel the grime on my skin. It covered my whole body. My eyes wondered with what little hope I had left. That was until my eyes hit bright red. How was it possible? That's when I saw his face. It was the man of my dreams and he was falling.
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I am going to have that be a dream and like have Ron be missing or something. So how did you like the first part?
criquite is appricated =]