Anyone fancy a teenage Bike story?

Well I wrote one... yay me! Ha ha, but seriously, it's apparently pretty good, so I'd like to hear some more comments on it.

The story is about Mike, a 16 year old boy who moves into the room above the garage of his coworker, Ollie. However, once he moves in, he starts having strange dreams about a boy with bright green eyes (this would be Billie, people) in a room full of posters and lyrics. It seems in his dreams that he and the boy are friends, but Mike begins to wonder if they're really just dreams.

I worked pretty hard on this, so comments would be appreciated.

*peace and love*

-Bobbye