So post an excerpt of your writing for the person below to rate.
It can be from a posted or unposted story.
And just a terminology for lesson for those like me who didn't know, "uneverything" means untitled/unposted/unfinished. Easier to type.
(Atë)
There’s a needle in Ryan’s vein. Brendon sees, but he doesn’t say anything. And then later it’s screams and yells. Ryan cries until he can’t anymore. He’s left sitting on the bed hiccupping while Brendon throws some clothes and his iPod in a suitcase before leaving to go back to his apartment. Ryan’s alone.
He throws his head back to scream, but the noise won’t come out.
So instead, he sleeps.
(Morpheus)
Ryan’s lying in a hospital bid while an old woman in a nurse’s uniform stands over him. She presses a glass into his hand.
“Drink, my child, drink.”
Ryan lifts the glass to his lips and swallows, sputtering and gasping, choking as the acidic liquid burns sliding down his throat. He can’t take in breath and after a moment, the edges of the room begin to darken.
“Do not bear false witness.” She presses two fingers to his forehead and Ryan collapses.
--Drink of the River.
It can be from a posted or unposted story.
And just a terminology for lesson for those like me who didn't know, "uneverything" means untitled/unposted/unfinished. Easier to type.
(Atë)
There’s a needle in Ryan’s vein. Brendon sees, but he doesn’t say anything. And then later it’s screams and yells. Ryan cries until he can’t anymore. He’s left sitting on the bed hiccupping while Brendon throws some clothes and his iPod in a suitcase before leaving to go back to his apartment. Ryan’s alone.
He throws his head back to scream, but the noise won’t come out.
So instead, he sleeps.
(Morpheus)
Ryan’s lying in a hospital bid while an old woman in a nurse’s uniform stands over him. She presses a glass into his hand.
“Drink, my child, drink.”
Ryan lifts the glass to his lips and swallows, sputtering and gasping, choking as the acidic liquid burns sliding down his throat. He can’t take in breath and after a moment, the edges of the room begin to darken.
“Do not bear false witness.” She presses two fingers to his forehead and Ryan collapses.
--Drink of the River.
February 4th, 2011 at 08:31pm