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I really don't want to start a review comment like this and I seriously do not mean to cause any offence but the first thing I thought when I finished reading this was that it read a bit like a government child abuse awareness anecdote, featuring Batman in order to "appeal to the kids". I don't pretend to know anything about Batman beyond the films dating back to about Val Kilmer but I was confused why he would stand around and recommend therapy rather than just spark the bloke out right away.Also one thing I noticed was that you occasionally muddle your tenses between present and past which I couldn't was intentional or not.
Aside from this the story was actually very well written. You effectively built suspense with passages such as "He will allow no one near her without his permission"You obviously proof read this and it came out quite well overall. A good short story for a fan-fic and would probably be much more appreciated by other Batman fans :)
Road to London: City of the Dead Please :)
I really don't want to start a review comment like this and I seriously do not mean to cause any offence but the first thing I thought when I finished reading this was that it read a bit like a government child abuse awareness anecdote, featuring Batman in order to "appeal to the kids". I don't pretend to know anything about Batman beyond the films dating back to about Val Kilmer but I was confused why he would stand around and recommend therapy rather than just spark the bloke out right away.Also one thing I noticed was that you occasionally muddle your tenses between present and past which I couldn't was intentional or not.
Aside from this the story was actually very well written. You effectively built suspense with passages such as "He will allow no one near her without his permission"You obviously proof read this and it came out quite well overall. A good short story for a fan-fic and would probably be much more appreciated by other Batman fans :)
Road to London: City of the Dead Please :)
May 9th, 2012 at 07:43pm