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  • nishinoya yu.

    nishinoya yu. (100)

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    astro velvet.:
    I really enjoyed this drabble! There was something very freeing about it like I felt a wave of relief in a way! To be honest, it almost makes me wish to have a fresh start as well, lol.

    I really loved the way you wrote this with the two contrasting characters. The way you describe it is so simplistic, but also strong. It's very easy to imagine these characters, especially because both characters are incredibly relatable and so real. I find myself relating to them both, but also desperately wishing I could be more the character who takes the chance to go to Spain. I think that's what I really like the most about your drabble, the way it makes me reflect within your characters.

    Loved it, well done!
    Terrible Things, please and thank you!
    May 1st, 2021 at 05:54am
  • nearly witches.

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    What I love about this piece is how descriptive it is. I only ever watched the first two series of Skins, so I'm not familiar at all with the characters and only vaguely know what happens to them all, but that doesn't matter at all. You paint such a wonderful picture of Rich and the way in which he thinks that it makes it so easy to imagine what he's going through. By the end I had this awful bittersweet feeling: he's hurting and always will, but he'll get through it in the end. I think it's such an accurate portrayal of grief, and even in the small space of this piece of writing, you illustrate his character (and through him also Grace's character) so well that this definitely reads as a piece of original fiction.

    There's this lovely juxtaposition as well, between the beginning and the end. You've got all of these hopeful "what if" moments, followed by this aspect of loss, then you've got this idea that no, he doesn't regret it at all, and all of these reasons why. The whole sun/moon/eclipse metaphor is beautiful as well, in a really melancholy way, and it just brings everything together so perfectly.

    I really enjoyed reading this. It was heart-breaking, but also uplifting at the same time.
    Calendula Sunrise, danke schönnnnnn
    May 3rd, 2021 at 08:53pm