Claimed.
"Woah. That was pretty hardcore I think. I love reading dark stuff that doesn't really have to do with suicide because there is so much suicide on this site it gets a little overwhelminag, so I was happy when I came to this.
This was really interesting and I just feel that I want to know more about these characters. Like why this girl had to die and why two of the three felt fine with it and Dawn was upset. More questions come to mind just thinking, like how August got the gun, why he and Kylie were perfectly fine killing the girl. And also, just what made them so crazy? I feel as though you could write a whole short story leading up to this point and it would be perfect. This was a great story to me, and it kept me interested the whole way through with your description and the bloodlust. One thing though, ...The door slammed open... I think that just sounds a little odd. Only people we usually hear doors slamming shut but that's not a huge thing.
I really liked this story though c:"
Uppers, Downers, All Arounders, please.
"Woah. That was pretty hardcore I think. I love reading dark stuff that doesn't really have to do with suicide because there is so much suicide on this site it gets a little overwhelminag, so I was happy when I came to this.
This was really interesting and I just feel that I want to know more about these characters. Like why this girl had to die and why two of the three felt fine with it and Dawn was upset. More questions come to mind just thinking, like how August got the gun, why he and Kylie were perfectly fine killing the girl. And also, just what made them so crazy? I feel as though you could write a whole short story leading up to this point and it would be perfect. This was a great story to me, and it kept me interested the whole way through with your description and the bloodlust. One thing though, ...The door slammed open... I think that just sounds a little odd. Only people we usually hear doors slamming shut but that's not a huge thing.
I really liked this story though c:"
Uppers, Downers, All Arounders, please.
July 11th, 2013 at 08:09pm