Well, I've gotten fantastic reviews from some very lovely people. So I thought I'd show you guys. (:
These are the best from my story
Ode to the Hummingbird :
This one's from
Caravaggio" I loved the method you chose in telling this story. How, while I was reading it, I almost felt as though someone was telling me about it; like it was happening in my community. The way people are always like, "Did you hear what happened to Mrs. Mitchell?" It was a great method, and I think it really made this hit closer to home. The fact that anorexia is a very serious mental illness, that can happen to anyone.
The only part that seemed unrealistic is that he was nine; although I could just be misinformed. I have to admit, I haven't really extensively researched the disease. I've never looked at age statistics. Still, it can happen to anyone with a functioning brain, so I suppose nine could happen.
Anyway - sorry for all the rambling - I thought that end line was immense. The story would've been great without it, but that last line blew it out of the water. It was very well written, and it was a very good read. I'm sad that I'm the first commenter on it. "
This one's from
Tiffany Danielle :
" Gorgeous. That is the first word that wiggled into my mind when I opened this story up. Well, actually, that's a lie, aha. That was the first word in my mind when I saw the title, gigglys. Really, if I was going on appearances, you could tell this story will be absolutely beautiful. The layout is elegant, adorable - just plain stunning, and readable - which is an amazing feat on it's own. c: I'm sure the only thing that can rival such a beautiful set up would be your story itself. c: <3
Eeeeeep. That summary? Art. Is their a word more amazing? I wish I knew one because I would definitely apply it here. Really, that was so stunning in such few words. It makes me want to speak with a hummingbird, you know. Just opens up my imagination time capsule and my mind and I just adore it. <3 Fabulous job. I'm amped and I haven't really read much, yet, aha. .////. <3 That's the sign of an epic author right there, yes ma'am. (:
One
You made me get snot on my hoodie, missy. ): This was so heartbreaking it made me tear up on the reals. It kind of feels like it was ripped out of my chest in such a beautiful manner. I can't tell if I want to sit here in awe of your writing skills or jump into this story and hug the poor boy. <3
Really, my heart goes out to him, but the awe I have your writing is paramount. You'd think that some of the words or the style of your writing would get even the slightest bit repeatitive - but it never did. I sat here, reading, absolutely riveted and I don't think I blinked. Not once.<3 It was like you hit some kind of writing groove, here. I could just ride the flow of this it was so smooth, so perfect. <3
You're like my writing idol right now, woman. :) <3 I am subscribing, for sure. <33 I need to know what happens to Timmy. I really hope he turns out okay. <33 "
This one's from
GhostieWinchester :
" This is so darkly touching and wonderful. Not that he does these things to himself, of course, but the emotion you put into the words and behind the story. It made me cry the entire time I was reading the first chapter. To think of anyone, especially someone so young, feeling that they need to hurt themself so horridly...
And contrary to what others have said, it's quite believable that a nine-year-old would go through something like this. The DSRM in psychological diagnosis has many outlines of disorders such as this that may manifest themselves as early as six. So I applaud your accuracy as well as the risk you took in choosing this age.
The workings of TImothy's mind as he remembers the incident with the cookie sheet are quite interesting. Again, your accuracy in portraying his mental disorder is shining through, making me feel all the more for him and wish that he could have a happy ending, even if that happy ending is him getting what he so seems to want. "
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These next ones are from my story
Oh, Moon :
GhostieWinchester" You are such a talented writer. And I say this with complete and utter honesty. This is the second piece of yours that captured my attention and held it completely all the way through. I wish my skill was anything equal to yours. :)
The prologue is so very powerful, yet so abstract at the same time. The use of disjointedness and your vivid emotive/descriptive writing made it all the more interesting and I was compelled to read on to the next chapter. I had planned on reading all three chapters from the outset, but even if I hadn't, this prologue would have spurred me on.
The memory at the start of the first chapter made my heart ache as I read it. I kid you not, the emotion and the feeling of pain and loss touched me very deeply. And it transitions so perfectly into the next part of the chapter.
The conversation between them is so normal. So natural. So everyday.
It's wonderful. And such a deep contrast to the prologue.
Your ability to always keep the reader guessing and use so many different hooks is so very impressive.
And the end was oddly suspenseful to me. I had to know more about the fire. About what happens.
Chapter two's memory was so sweet. So very lovely. Another perfectly placed contrast, not only to previous chapters, but to the rest of this chapter as well.
Her pain is just so very real. So palpable. I wish I could help her, in some way. It's as if I'm reading about a real person. Watching them go through all this.
Because his body was mixed with the soil and burned trees now.
Johnny was the wildflowers and the soil. Johnny was the trees and the wind. But Johnny didn't have any vocal chords. Johnny didn't even have a smile.These lines were so beautiful. So powerful.
Once again, you have me in tears.
And hooked to your work.
*subscribed* "
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