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Nanih Waiya
- pocahontas.:
Firstly, I really like your layout and how nicely the setup of your summary matches with it. The content itself is rather nice - two paragraphs, a good length especially at a glance. (Especially because of the font size!) Sneaking the character images into the quote was a nice touch - the quote, I might add, was a nice touch to the summary matching up with the first sentences.
Relating beauty to an illusion is rather telling of your character. There's always a catch with a character this perfect, and I after reading this one paragraph I really want to know what it is. You reveal a lot about her character in terms of both physical and characteristic attributes. cat like should be cat-like.
You're really fabulous at making actual writing sound like poetry. Is it weird that your description of Byunghee reminds me of the Hulk? Part of me hopes that these are just some really poetic descriptions, but the other part hopes that this is actually some sort of supernatural tale. I mean, what appears to be super-strength, Grim Reaper, the Devil? This sounds like the perfect not-quite-antagonist-not-quite-protagonist lead male story where the girl stumbles into a different world.
Your character page is a great addition to this! I'm not sure if you wanted things to be given away by the descriptions that weren't in the summary, but that totally happens. Of course I'm happy with this because it means I didn't have to wait to find out if my guess was correct~Very nicely done - subscribed!
June 26th, 2016 at 11:51am