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Well, I quite enjoyed this piece. It was very eloquent and beautiful. I appreciated it. The first sentence feels like it dose't really seem to flow to me I think that could be fixed easily. I like this guy's self-reflection. I think my favorite parts are both in the first paragraph. I particularly like " My heart throbs, but it feels heavy, as if the muscle is having trouble doing its usual function of pumping my blood." As well that you said "the meteorological conditions". I find myself wondering was this a young love or older? Perhaps they were young and he still mourns for her after all this time? lol because when it's love, it's love. He says "we lost power" but to me it seemed he lived alone.
Touch Me
Well, I quite enjoyed this piece. It was very eloquent and beautiful. I appreciated it. The first sentence feels like it dose't really seem to flow to me I think that could be fixed easily. I like this guy's self-reflection. I think my favorite parts are both in the first paragraph. I particularly like " My heart throbs, but it feels heavy, as if the muscle is having trouble doing its usual function of pumping my blood." As well that you said "the meteorological conditions". I find myself wondering was this a young love or older? Perhaps they were young and he still mourns for her after all this time? lol because when it's love, it's love. He says "we lost power" but to me it seemed he lived alone.
Touch Me
April 5th, 2014 at 06:50am