Massie Massacre VS The Stupid World
- saint mungo.:
- First off, I love the layout! It's definitely one of the best ones I've seen here on Mibba.
I loved the first chapter! Usually I don't like big chunks of description with rarely any dialogue, but your first chapter managed to pull it off very well. Your descriptions of the funeral were spot on, and I loved that the dialogue used in regards to what the priest said, etc, were very appropriate for the setting and the mood of the story.
The second chapter, was fantastic as well. I love how you really went in depth about Parker and Caroline's relationship, and also left a bit of Parker and Grace's relationship a mystery (like as to why they broke up, if they're going to get back together, etc...)
I've only read up to chapter two, but I'll definitely be continuing along with this story. Wonderful job! (:
September 26th, 2011 at 02:18am