Hi. Thanks for commenting. I will try to read the first chapter later but I did read what the book was about. I do like the idea of the story but as I read through it, I started getting bored or it. Sorry but if it's going to be a book at least make the little paragraph explaining the story sound a bit more interesting. Sorry if it sound offensive but I just wanted to say that, I mean if it turns into a book and a person only reads that part ("About the Book") they would think, "Why should I read it. It's about a girl losing her parent. Not original." So my tip is to add something to that part, something that would make it sparkle with originality. (I'm sorry if it was offensive, I just wanted to say that)
Haha I can't rhyme either. Don't worry, that makes 2 of us. Haha
People say that, my poems make them feel like I'm talking to them, ya, it's pretty weird.