Unneeded intricacy / Comments, page 16

Aya26Storm (100)

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If you got nothing to say nice please keep your rude and nasty comments to yourself! No one asked you to read my poem! Why don't you do something that is more productive than being a nasty person! You don't know me or why I wrote this poem or what is going on in my life. U__U

First off, there is so much going on in my life for you to misunderstood.
I am being productive but who says I don't have sorrow & despair I am feeling from my grief.
I am at the point of becoming homeless, my marriage is on the rocks, I lost my job and jobs are limited in my state.
I had to move to my parents so I wouldn't live on the streets at that point but then my step dad lost his job.

It got even worse as I tried my best to find a job.
Many nights sleepless & many tears I shed because of my family being so close to the poor house living on the streets with no money.
My little sister telling me she is about to kill herself, either by slitting her throat or hanging herself.

So I have to worry about her killing herself or running away to some guy online that is her boyfriend in another state.
I wrote the "Inner Darkness" from my side that is hopeless but at the same time the other side of me is fighting for hope.

It’s a battle of life & death.

You shouldn’t go into peoples poems, stories ect without knowing what was happening at the time they created their creation.
Not all my poems are dark.
I write what I am feeling at the time.
All my friends say I am someone they can count on & tell me anything and listen to my advice when they can't determine what is the best decision they should choose.

I didn’t join Mibba to gain enemies but rather friends.
You should take a look at my profile to get a better understanding of whom I really am.
You will get a better view instead from my poem you looked at.
Instead of judging me so harshly I hope you could at least be on neutral grounds if you don’t want to be friends with me.
Learn to agree to dis-agree, I both of our parts.
I am a nice person and I just wanted tips not insults for writing something depressing when I have serious issues in my life along with depression (The depression illness) from all the horror-able experiences in my life.

Your Mibba member
Aya26Storm AKA Laura Overton

June 27th, 2009 at 04:43pm

mankind's last hope? (900)

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age is but a number, not counted by the years, but how you act and present yourself. Don't worry, i don't recant opinions. I agree with your POV,but still, there is that acception of people who only write what they think the masses will like, as if to "fit in". and even if they did write those things in pure anguish, if what that person is writin is true and from the heart, and it's the only sujbect matter at hand for their portfolio, well let's just say that i won't tolerate someone who complains about a set issue or emotion and doesn't do diddly to fix it. You should grow w/ poetry, not rot with it.

June 26th, 2009 at 02:35am

Thats Just Wrong?? (100)

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how are you,whats going on??

June 25th, 2009 at 06:58pm

mankind's last hope? (900)

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me, it's whatever. Thank you for your opinion and input.
It's one thing to write a poem about how you feel or what you're thinking, but when MAJORITY of your poetry is riddle with "BLOOD, BLACK, KNIFE, RAZOR, DEATH, PAIN, SUFFERING" then it gets real old real quick and that harbors on "bitching" than actual poetry. Sure poetry is about self expression, but it's about growth, progression, and if someone iswriting a poem to fit in, or they refuse to change up their subject matter that has been cloggin up this sight for the past two years, then yeah, that person needs therapy and not this website to sort out their issues. I'm just annoyed with people writing a mindless rant about cliche', stereotypical, over-used, and dried out jargon, only because they can't look outside of their angst. Maybe if they stopped writing that stuff ALL THE TIME, they'd be able to, i don't know, have a more positive outlook on things. Cause guess what, i used to be just like that, writing boring toneless rambles and labeling it as "Poetry". But i learned real quick, that poetry doesn't have to be all about personal suffering or despair. ALl in all, i'm just ticked because i read a shit poem about someone having to pee, it was barely a stanza long, and it go accolades as if Tolstoy had written it himself! Yet, five pages back, there was a really well written poem by another user, who didn't get a single comment or even a view! Now why is that? Maybe because that person didn't have "BLACK, PAIN, HURT, BLOOD, RAZOR, SUFFERING, OR DEATH" in the title?

June 25th, 2009 at 02:06am