That's what my mum said! She said she hated it and there was absolutely nothing to it. But she also mentioned that she'd still buy the rest to see what happens, but will still not accept too much. I'm barely half way through it and I don't know how I'm going to finish. If I'm going to finish it.
I actually just read your article before you linked me to it, hahah. I literally had to through the book at the wall a couple of times because it was so damn unrealistic. -__-
Your comment on my pop punk article was so honest and really nice! I definitely relate to what you said and overall I love knowing music no one else knows because it makes going to their shows more personal and makes me feel like the band is all mine :3
Thanks for the Dial Tone comment. I actually do agree with most of what you said; I wasn't happy with it when it was uploaded, but I couldn't place my finger on what, exactly, didn't quite hit me right. You pointed out the flaws better than anyone else, which I really appreciate.
The only thing I did disagree with was that Izzy should be more emotional as she prepares to die. From personal experience with attempted suicide and dealing with the suicide attempts of several friends, I've noticed that many people are very flat and emotionless when they discuss ending their lives. I think that's really the way you have to be if you're serious about it - being too emotional seems to me like you're still really desperate to want to live, if that makes sense. I was always much more terrified when it sounded like my friends were scary-calm, because they had genuinely given up and accepted that they wanted to die.
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Anyway, yes, thank you very very much. I'm planning on revising this before the contest ends, and I'll keep your comment in mind when I do so. You gave me a lot to think about. :D (Oh, and the contest says that we don't have to actually mention the table if we don't want to. I was assuming there was a table in Izzy's house somewhere that Brandon would have had to pass to get to his friend. :P)
Thank you so much for the comment on Love & Toast! And, yeah, I noticed the rule. And there is a table. And two people. They're not quite in the same room, but hey, I'll just make the argument that love transports itself across telephone wires. Till they're... in the same room. Anywho! Thanks! :3
Oh okay. I tried fixing it but it won't let me acess the article now that it's published. Bummer. Those apps sound neat, I will have to check some of them out. I have a Mac I just never go to the app store. I have an app called focuson that blocks out parts of the screen but it's kind of annoying, plus I get distracted anyway. I'm a pretty easily distracted person.
Thank you for the tips you gave me! I can't remember where I read the 'reading backwards' tip. It's the craziest thing ever and honestly, half the time I forget to listen to my own tips, but I remember an author I liked talking about using it as a tool. But thank you again for the info and tips and such, much appreciated.
Thanks for the comment on my article. I've honestly never heard of those sites (are they sites?) you mentioned at the end. Aside from Mibba and WeHeartIt I shy away from the Internet. I'll add some of the things you suggested. I didn't mention second POV because that's usually (but very rarely) used in technical writing. I was more focused on fiction. I'll fix the typos too. But "afraid" is how you spell that.
By reading backwards I meant literally reading the words backwards. As in, start from the end and read each word backwards. It's really uncomfortable because nothing makes sense but that's the point. Mistakes are more obvious because nothing flows.
Seriously though, thank you for the comment and despite the mistakes I'm glad you thought I was good. It means a lot since this was my first article.
My first real criticism! Making progress! I like it. I will definitely take what you said into account. I'll be on vacation for the next nine days but I'll try and see if I can update! I mean, I won't try too hard, but I'll give it an honest effort!
First of all, I would like to thank you for leaving the comment on my Vulnerable review. The introduction and conclusion are my favorite parts from the review :) It is actually my English assignment to write an article/review for magazines, so I have to keep it short due to the word limit. I'm aware of how most of The Used fans got hooked up since they released In Love and Death and Lies for the Liars. That's why I mentioned it in my review :) However, I personally think that with Vulnerable, The Used proofs of how grown up they are musically as a band. They experimented with their music, yet they managed to produce songs that somehow still sound like The Used that we've known. And I agree with you, they totally pulled it off really well!
Hello. Thank you sooo much for the comment. I loved it and nearly did a black flip. I'm sorry about the semicolons/commas. I'm sort of a comma addict and I tend to overdue it and put it in the wrong place. For this, I am truly sorry. BUT THANK YOU for the link to help. I'll be sure to read it and hope to improve for the chap tonight. Again, thank you for the comment and advice. Please in the future, do not hesitate to point out more IF I have anymore stuff to work on.
Yes haha :] its pretty vague and rushed, but there is a twist and I am very excited :D I just wanted to rework it without having to start from scratch. Thanks again :]
Thanks for the comment :) The first two chapters are very rushed and straight-forward, but afterwards they become more interesting. I wrote this story when I was younger, and really did a lot of work to it compared to what it was. But thanks a lot, I'll be sure to work on that in the future :D
I'm so undeniably slow when it comes to anything these days >.< I just want to say thank you for pointing out the problem I had on my site, (with the blink 182 layout). :) I think I fixed it for now, and I hope I never do this again. Haha.
Helllllo :) I have used one of your layouts (Pretty In Pink) But i can't figure out how to change the colours on some things, could you please get back to me about how to change the colour in the stories box. Thank-you.