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Naw, no NaNo for me. This is my last month before finals, so I really need to study. And I don't want to start a new book when I'm already juggling 3.

Thanks for the input! Hmm yeah, I did have some people saying the plot was moving too fast and I needed more lazy moments. I'll definitely add that in! Gah, I love Joren so much, but my love for Cle overshadowed him. xD Eepp. That must be fixed!

Thanks so much for the comment and for catching up with the story! :D Really good to see you again!

Ahhhh yes, I know Joren's been left out. >__< That was.. unintentional. I'm not sure how to include him more, though. Any ideas?? I feel like i need to do ANOTHER complete rewrite with Joren having a bigger presence. Ugh.

Ah... yes, Cleon and Kairi can speak with Behemoth. I... just haven't figured out why they haven't yet. xD ARG, plot hole!!! I'm thinking that since Behemoth's sealed inside Cleon, its full powers--including speech--are also barred. So once it fully comes out, then Cle and Kai will be able to hear its voice.

Oh, and the beasts (I've just figured out) are genderless! :D They are neither male nor female since they don't reproduce.

lololol. :)

... xD And now you sound like Lina.

Lol, yeah, I just made up the Joren backstory on the spot last time, which is one reason why I'm rewriting the series. :)

The book is really short at this point (about 35k words, whereas a fantasy novel is usually over 80k words) so I wanted something to keep them busy for a while... Yeah, I think I'll make Kairi pay Reks a visit, then. :) THEN maybe some bandit attacks signaling the beginning of the war.. and it can go from there. Maybe they can do some traveling for diplomatic meetings or something... *gears turning in my head* Thanks so much for the help! :)

Thank you sooo much for that lovely comment! :D I love nitpicks. Thanks! And glad you're enjoying the story! >__< Poor Joren.
And since you generally know how the story goes (in terms of the war and Joren's place in it all, and all that) I'm kind of at a loss as to what happens next in the story before the big battle between Cleon and Kairi at the end of this book... Like, should Kairi go to District Zero to find Reks because she's worried about Joren, or should they go do something else... fight some bandits..... AGH, do you have any ideas?

Hehe. It was the the only name that really fit him, and I've been calling him that for over a year now, so I'm very used to it. Hopefully the rest of you will, eventually, too. :)

Hmm yes, I guess Caleb is quite boring when compared to Jared. xD Jared takes Kara out for ice cream, wrestles with her, fights with nerf swords with her, bakes brownies with her...

Ah, good to hear that it makes Darren more three dimensional! :D

Yeah.. I don't understand the hate, either :(
"But please don't let Caleb come back! Or I will seriously turn into a character and kill him!"
"you seriously had to bring CALEB back?!?!?! *hits head off of computer desk over and over*"
"since I started reading , l've hated Caleb . It's just been this intense , burning inferno of dislike. So can you just kill off Caleb or something?"
"kill off Caleb of something. Kara and Jared all the way."
"Screw Caleb."

..... :(

x3 Aw, thank you!! I'm flattered you'd take the time to reread it. Actually, I was rereading some of the earlier chapters and I cringed. You can completely see the writing get better as time goes on. Haha, I found it kind of funny. :)

And there will definitely be actiony bits :) I need to get over this little speed bump with Caleb, first, but then it'll go right back into the kick-butt action sequences.

Oh, wow, you're like the only person that LIKES Caleb! Most people hate his guts for some reason.... xD I like him... Granted I like Jared more... but still... Caleb's alright... .......

But my favorites are Shaun and Ryo. Seriously, have you noticed how AWESOME and funny Shaun is when he's not around Kara? God, I love that man xD
Ryo's just this goofy awesome fun idiot that I love to pieces. In real life, I'd LOVE to have a guy like Ryo for a boyfriend.

Aw, you're very welcome! Gosh, you're taking the time to read and comment on my work! The least I can do it thank you for it. :)

Thanks for the comment! Oh, yeah I posted a chapter yesterday and another one this morning. :P

Yeah, I mentioned very briefly that Annie's Uncle was a professor at Yale somewhere at the beginning.

Nope, you totally hit the mark! That's exactly what I was going for with this chapter. :) Nice job! And now I feel accomplished because you actually caught onto that with just a first draft! WOO

It's kind of... foreshadowing a bit. With what you said. ;)

OO! I know when he can wear one! Won't be until near the end of the book, though :(

:9 maybe I should give Darren a reason to wear a tux then... *licks lips*

Oh, and you're also like the 3rd person to say that Darren doing calculus was what sold you. xD POWER TO THE NERDS! *fist pumps the air*

Aw, thank you so much! :D
Haha, you're the 4th person to compare Darren to Edward, but everyone said Darren was much cooler than Edward, which makes me super happy.

Alright, I think I'll have a mix of everything then :) That's how I like it. Honestly, just writing the romance was getting on my nerves. I need to bloody SOMEONE up each story. Plus, a shirtless guy covered in blood? Can you GET any sexier than that? xD

Thanks so much for the feedback!

Yeah, the main plot's going to remain the same with the behemoth and the war and all. Just all the stuff leading up to it will change, and some minor details of the sub-plots.

Ah, yes! I knew I was forcing all the information too quickly. I'll definitely ease into it better when I go back to edit.

Lol, yes, Kairi's crush on Joren IS nauseating :) Haha, but I'll try to tone it down a bit.

Thanks again! I really appreciate it.

Hey! Since you've shown interest in my writing before, just letting you know that I've started a new story. I'm very excited to announce that I've started posting the rewrite of The Guardian Rhapsody, now titled The Guardian Legend! This book has been my absolute life obsession since elementary school, so I'm putting everything I've got into writing it. I'd really love it if you'd check it out and tell me what you think!
http://stories.mibba.com/read/386059/The-Guardian-Legend-Book-I-Kairi/
Thanks a bunch!
-Yuffie