I need people to read chapter one of Jasmine and comment. I wouldn't usually be demanding but I need to hear opinions. I also would like comments on it's sequel The Dark Twins.I will try and comment swap are anything but pretty please comment on mine.I would prefer poem comments though.Thank you if you respond.grr the word count on this is rediculous. I just want to ask a simple, short question.oh...

I redid my first chapter of Jasmine and now I would like your opinions. Tell me if it is better or worse than it was before.On a different note, my friend confused the hell out of me. He made me think he knew about something he shouldn't have but boy was I wrong. Thankfully I found out what he meant and I managed to not tell im what was up. I can't standit when my friend does that, tell me only a...

Well, after looking through my first chapter I have decided to redo most of it, adding a prologue to start with. I have been on Scribophile and have seen how poorly written my story actually is.ok so here is what is happening.1.Jasmine is getting a prologue.This is essentially the first paragraph or so but since the writing style is different, I have decided to take it out of the actual...

ok so first things first. Wow I am 21 in a few weeks and it is quite scary. the downside of this is? All my pals are on holiday so it is going to be a lame birthday. On the plus I have a trip to Wales to look forward to in september, a spa day to look forward to and plenty of gifts.on side note my keyboard sucks. Meh!Secondly. Has anyone who reads this read my story Jasmine? If you have could you...

I know it is bad to write a sequel to a story which isn't finished but I wanted to get the idea out. I would like some feedback on my idea. The story was original created to find flaws with the first one but the idea stuck and now I feel like writing it.So tell me what you tink and I will comment on a story or poem for you. what do you say to that?]The dark twins is the name of the new story.on a...

AAAARGGGHHHH! ok got that out now for the rant. Ever had one of those friends who does not quite take the hint and continues to bug you even though you are obviously moody from the monthly torment?Well I just got hacked off with my so called friend after he joke about how unfortunate he was to meet me. I mean come on lad I told you I was bitch queen from hell three times and warned you about my...

I am getting quite fed up of being dyslexic. I am only mildly so but still it is a royal pain when writing stories. I have had a few comments about my grammar which is annoying since they don't tell me where the errors are. I don't see my grammatical errors at all so telling me there are some is pointless unless you give me an idea of where they are otherwise I cannot correct them. I know it...

So I am stuck at my boyfriend's with 3 dogs and nothing to do!!! I am also cranky and in so much pain. anyone got any amusing stories or poems I can read?Also been trying to tell my pal that their life dosn't go downhill from 21. Anyone agree with this statement or if you don't how do I convince my friend it isn't so? I do actual worry about them and I don't want my friend to feel like this.Can...

Hello. I have noticed that asking people to review my story as a whole is pointless as it is too long. Instead I am going to pick out parts that need reviewing and ask people who write about that sort of thing to help out if they could. For instance I am terrible at battle scenes but I have one in my story Jasmine. Anyone got any tips?I know I am being pesky but I really value peoples opinion on...

Well call me annoying or pesky but I would really appreciate some comments on my story Jasmine. Unfortunately I cannot link things as I am useless with that sort of thing. Now I bet you're wondering why I am so desperate for comments. Well I wish to publish my story however in order to do so I need it critiqued by the age range I am aiming at which makes you Mibba lot perfect for the job. In...

Well so much for a dream. I thought I could get my story good enough to publish but sadly even I have to now admit it is in no way good enough. I have been over it time and time again but even with the changes it just does not look good enough. I suppose I should have expected this... bit of a silly hope really. Oh well I suppose it was fun writing it even if it wont be good enough.Is it too...

well my brain doesn't get the message. doesn't get that there is only one guy in my life. can't stop thinking of a friend as something else. stupid brain. no stupid me. why does my friend have to be around more than my boyfriend. grr I hate myself for this. I don't get why I have this problem, why I can't think of my boyfriend at all. the thoughts of my friend are getting more intense. maybe it is...