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  • a7x.Sick.Puppie.x

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    awwww! I'm actually really really happy that my comment made your day haha
    I love it when you get a comment that does that :D

    Everyone looks better compared to me xD
    2 years ago, i think, I used to update daily.
    It lasted for months as well! :O
    I honestly have no idea how I managed to do that :S Especially as I'm so bad at updating on time now

    TEAM CHASE ALL THE WAY <3
    I always go with the bad boy. In real life I'd be like AHHHHHHHH SCARY BAD ASS KID but in stories I like them haha

    I CAN'T WAIT FOR YOU TO UPDATE <3
    Early for you is possibly under a week if you're at your normal standard thingys... :) I like that xD

    My grammar and everything is so bad when I write comments...
    July 13th, 2012 at 06:00pm
  • geneva

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    no problem! im not kidding i worshipped you a while back because i was literally obsessed (good way of course) with your stories ^_^ homophobe has rekindled my obsession
    July 13th, 2012 at 07:45am
  • Elephant PJs

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    Aw, no problem! Thank you for writing such a good story xD

    Yeah, if it's just a chick minus boobs and plus a penis...I don't tend to read it and I definitely will not comment. It bothers me A LOT. But you're doing a great job. Like, I could tell when I was reading it that you got it, if you know what I mean. It's refreshing :)
    July 13th, 2012 at 01:17am
  • Baby-I-like-it97

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    Your welcome! And I'm sure you will!
    July 13th, 2012 at 12:55am
  • youth and whiskey.

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    SO I SAW YOUR COMMENT ON YOUR BODY IS A WONDERLAND, aren't those stories lovely? Happy face
    July 12th, 2012 at 03:10pm
  • the4PonyGirls

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    Thanks for the comment on "John doe".
    I'll just have to consider a few alternative layouts, for some chapters, like this 1.
    Changing the summary is the easy part, it's just there to help the story, so I had to ad it, to John, as well.
    Then comes the hard part, the actualö story about John doe.
    Thanks, you solved a problem, since I had obviously failed to get the spelling right.
    Just like I had missed a few other typos.
    A different perspective, certainly. Only now it's someone from where people expected him,
    when so much is happening where you know little to nothing about.

    You put up a very good comment, with structure like few, even though the later part is hard to read.

    I expect to go over this several more times, before I can consider it complete.

    Since we'll see more of our new friend; John, I guess I'll need someone like you, in order to tell me, all the things I missed.
    July 8th, 2012 at 06:45am
  • SadieJBlue

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    I wasn't mad or anything Very Happy I really really appreciated the feedback. I'm quite good at taking things that I'm doing wrong and working on them to do good and I can only do that when people point out where I was going wrong. So honestly, thank you <3 Sadie J. Blue xxx
    July 7th, 2012 at 07:05pm
  • Wei-Wei

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    Thank you very mush for the advise! I will try harder to write better. :D
    July 7th, 2012 at 09:09am
  • SadieJBlue

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    Thank you so much for your constructive comment. I have since added spacing in each chapter, honestly, completely forgot about that room. Kind of got a little bit of a red face there. I have since re-written the first chapter to make my character seem a little bit more appealing, its hard to do because she is meant to be very vain but through out the story she grows. I've also put more into why she is like that. I have also got an editor on bored to take care of all those stupid little spelling and grammar mistakes. Thank you so much on the compliments of my description and action, it means a lot to me to know that I'm going right somewhere. Your comment, seriously, helped me improve so thank you for that, Sadie J. Blue xxx
    July 7th, 2012 at 04:40am
  • skittles36

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    Thank you for that!! :D For all of your comments, I'll fix up what you've recommended me to fix! I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter! :D
    July 7th, 2012 at 01:35am
  • Sunshining

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    Thanks for taking the time and reading even though it's not what you normally do!
    I'll go back and fix those, I don't even think I realized that I was doing it and if you hadn't pointed it out I probably would have just kept on trekking!
    July 7th, 2012 at 01:34am
  • toptastic

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    Thank you SO much for your comment on my story! x3 I really appreciate the constructive criticism. I fixed all the things you mentioned and now I feel like the story is better haha
    and next chapter I'm definitely going to describe the surroundings more^^
    Thanks for actually giving helpful advice instead of just praising or something!
    OH but all your praising did make me happy too haha I've always liked writer darker things but never took a shot at it so I'm glad its going ok c: again, thanks!
    July 6th, 2012 at 08:53pm
  • Somethin'else

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    I think your comment for my story "long live" was the best I've gotten so far... People really aren't interested and they say it's because my story's sounding like every other one out there, but I really haven't even gotten to the main plot yet.

    As for my layout, I'm still trying to figure the stupid layout maker out. To me it's extremely confusing. I can try to put more color into the background (I was thinking of adding green to the purple) but when I do that, I think of a more girl story than a vamp one, so if you had color suggestions, please give! I have a picture that I would really like to use, but I don't know how to put pictures in.

    As for the spelling, all I can say is 'oops.' lol I'm a terrible speller. I'm very sad they don't have spell check on here.

    Thank you so much for your comment. I keep going back and changing things, but I haven't quite hit the sweet spot where people actually like it. lol
    July 5th, 2012 at 11:08pm
  • daisyfairy

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    thanks so much for the comment, and thanks for the crit, i'm just about to head in and make some alterations. <3
    June 18th, 2012 at 11:32am
  • Average Lifesaver;;

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    Thanks for the comment on GH. Glad you're diggin' it so far(:

    The prologue definitely needs a lot of work, so I'll go through and fix those things that you mentioned XD
    June 14th, 2012 at 02:35am
  • morshu101

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    Thank you for the comment, and I'm glad you share my obsession for first sentences. Mine also goes for last sentences as well.
    June 12th, 2012 at 01:12pm
  • animal soup

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    I'm really glad that you liked seeing my comment, haha. :] It's always really nice to hear that someone likes your work! Especially a story that you end up caring a lot about. Finding your story on here actually made MY week. Seriously, it was awesome and gave me entertainment for a couple of hours. :] Your writing really is fantastic. I'm glad you like Horizon Lines! I'm working on the sequel right now, actually. :] How long have you been writing on here?
    June 8th, 2012 at 08:19pm
  • a7x.Sick.Puppie.x

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    You're welcome! XD
    I don't think I've ever been called awesome so many times haha
    I'm now thanking you for thanking me because your thank you made me feel dead happy xD
    I'm sooooooooooooooo appreciated!
    I wish I could make stories up as I go along :(
    I use to always do that because I'd have an idea for like a first chapter then just go with it.
    I think my best story was one that I made up completely as I went along
    Now I have to plan for ages and ages and ages and by the end of my planning I'm just like 'grrrrrrrrrrr this story isn't even good :(' so then I plan another one and the cycle continues :(
    Oh wells.
    You're welcome for the comments :P
    I really loved reading it :D
    It's awesome and I randomly got inspiration when I was reading it too
    I haven't wrote anything myself in so long, but I sort of wanted to again when I read your story :)
    So, when I get time I might try and get over my writers block or something xD
    And you're definitely right about one thing... You can't, repeat, YOU CAN NOT have a story without a penis joke haha
    Loved it!
    June 8th, 2012 at 05:37pm
  • A T T A C K !

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    NO NO NO NO NOOOO! YOU ARE an AH-MAZING WRITER! :3 I absolutely love your story, it's just so perfect... and funny. Like, you have no idea how much your chapters make me laugh and coo and just melt inside from the pure awesomeness of your writing!
    It honestly flatters me when you say you like my story, because YOU are the writing goddess over here. You think you freak out... I. FREAK. OUT. MORE ^_^
    June 8th, 2012 at 08:06am
  • the.demon.inside

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    No prob, it's a really good story. ^^
    June 8th, 2012 at 04:45am