well, i've been working on this one for a while, and i have a bit of the sequel already.because i'm useless, somebody needs to slap me for doing this :D!but anyways,i'm going to post the first (and maybe second) chapter of my story, it's a Jared Leto one, and i want feedback on it. and no, not because i'm being selfish, but because i want to know if there is any point in continuing, because it's a...