CatherineMary / Comments

She can and that is a cruel thing to do. You have a lot of creative ways to have Ella tell the truth in many ways other than the raw crying sobbing with mocos coming out and telling her sob story, that gets pretty old really fast. She would need to if she is going to pull their leg after doing something like that.

He won't be that old, but just looking into the future 2025 makes me feel old, but in actuality I would only be 34 haha. Yeah, it's a short story, but like you said your chapters get pretty long so it all comes out perfectly.

They should, but the bugging of something can lead to being rude without intention and I don't Ella would have a hard time being rude no matter who it is. Something as sensitive as her past, she has no boundaries and would do anything to keep it hidden.

That would be horrible haha you can always make it up as you go instead of updating it yearly. Alright, I don't know why that year but I know he would be pretty old by then haha I guess this will be a short story then? From what I am guessing with a year cover up a chapter.

You're welcome. I know people do a wonderful job at creating their characters, but when they start acting different because they are opening up since everyone thinks that people generally have to cry when they reveal their dark past when that's not that case. I don't see Ella crying over something like that, she has tough skin and burying the hatchet enough times that it doesn't affect her as much.

True, but also dogs can sense your true nature like if you are uncomfortable or not and since Ella is going to be around Judas since he is a pup, it will be easy for the two to get along. I get you and I get like that too haha every embarrassing moment or cruel one I would run over in my head when I am alone and instantly feel bad about it. No one is truly that cruel unless they were an axe murderer or something, I doubt Ella is so I know her cold exterior is a front. A defense mechanism that can get her into a lot of trouble and have no friends, no real friends that is.

He is picking up his pace in a lot of things, but I guess he is more in demand since he has so much creativity and want to do all the things he has set out to do and more. I get it, once you start something it starts to expand and you think of other things you want to do as well.

Your never too old to bring your one night stand home with you, but it will get awkward seeing that she lives with her fuck buddy and his brother who she has respect for both of them so yeah it can be crossing the line if she brought them home with her. Ella should open up more, in her own way of course, opening up is difficult for her since it took a lot to tell Jared about her parents situation. So I thinking she should be awkward or horribly rude when she opens up more since she doesn't have practice haha

True, Ella is truly one of a kind and brushes off things. I also have a feeling that Ella is going to treat Judas a lot better than she is has been treating Jared. As for having her pushed to the edge, well that is difficult since she brushes everything off so quickly before they can sink in. Maybe the edge is when Jared tells her how he feels, how he hates how distant she is, that is can be cold at times and acts like a guy honestly, she doesn't act like a girl at all. Her manners are not lady like in the slightest so maybe something simple like the truth from Jared can be her downfall to cracking. I have no idea, I think he just likes the single life. He has so much going on from what people tell me and having a serious relationship isn't his top priority. *shrugs* whatever it is, as long as he is happy, right? haha I didn't notice until a few months back. I knew who they were a few years ago before they won that MTV award, but only paid attention to their music like you did and when I saw pictures of him, didn't phase me. I used to confuse him with Jay Leno haha well the names not faces.

I see, well funny how things work out huh? lol

They seriously need a break from one another since both of them are just confusing, Jared is a lot more clear where Ella I have no idea why she is acting the way she does and she's such a mystery it bugs me like it bugs Jared haha it's sad that she is covering up so much when she has known Jared for years now and even going as far as playing along with the whole getting married charade and still acting like it when the realtor leaves.

Oh that will take a while from where this is going, it feels like Jared is tip toeing around Ella to, poking experimentally to see if she would squirm and if not then he would keep doing it until she does and backs off.
There's always a reason it can be simple as he prefers blondes over anything else, everyone has their preferences I just find it funny that if you look through your countless boyfriend or girlfriends and see a pattern of similar traits, I find it interesting. I was wondering if you were going to add Diaz to the mix and yeah they were together for a while. I had no idea who they were back then since I had zero interest in celebrities or who they were, I slowly was educated by a friend early high school years haha

Songs can really inspire you to write a certain plot and make the characters you create come alive. Two great songs that I have heard of before. :)

haha no problems there! I get like that all the time with some of my characters and fall into this stump to make sure that I keep them in character and sometimes when you make your female lead so closed off you don't know how to let that wall down. You needed that break! Hell, I needed a break after reading that chapter haha watched some comedy to let out some steam.

No, it's good. I think it's great when you are far ahead because you get to look back and see what you have written and if you think you can make it better, then you have time to improve your story. It's the best thing you can do honestly and I love your story. I see, Jared isn't going to be Godzilla and destroy everything? haha I see him as the type of guy that explodes when things don't pan out his way for some reason...

I find it hilarious. It's typical though the one that doesn't stick to a relationship or doesn't want one gives the best advice because they are looking from the outside in. The sad thing is, they don't take their own advice at times and make the same mistakes their friends make. Like you said, Shannon knows his little bro and will do anything to protect him from Ella. Jared should put his guard up, but I assume it's a little too late for that and Ella will be the main reason why Jared starts having detached relationships and want to screw around with every blond girl he sees. I swear every time I have seen a pic of him, he has some blond woman with him haha

No I wouldn't stop reading no matter how frustrated I get with a character. Usually when I get frustrated it's a good thing beacuse you make her so believable. I love hard headed, closed off characters. I know lots of people don't like the detachment and only read the cliche ones, but I like the abnormal things like Ella. I might want to punch her, depends on how I'm feeling *cracks knuckles* jk. Jared is getting pounded into the ground by Ella, in a bad way, nothing sexual XD he is losing the war. Yay more Shannon time! Great to hear that! I missed him. Oh no problem and really? Well that's great! It's good to have an example so they know what you are looking for. To be honest, it's not all that hard, takes me less than a few mintues to write something that I thought about the chapter. Good to hear haha glad to see that my input helps you :)

No I don't mind, I'm flattered actually haha idk why though. I get you, it's hard to get people to actually put some thoughts into it. It's not hard, you are just adding what you think of the story into your own words, there is no right or wrong answer there. Nothing, there is nothing else to say when people say that so I just answer 'thanks, enjoy the story' haha than I give these long speeches to the ones that left something meaningful in the comment box. Alright, well I am excited for it!

I knew that one day Jared will give her that choice and I kind of think that Ella wouldn't choose him over being single. You're welcome. I hate it when people just comment 'I like it' or 'update soon' I just think what do you like about it? Give me something that you like or what you thought about the chapter. I rather have one sentence about your thoughts than saying something as unsentimental as 'i like it'.

I'm slowly getting used to it and my layouts are alright, simple, but doable like you do it. No your layout is fine. I was just extra picky that day and decided to give it a chance. I prefer your layout than the ones that are premade by others, those I usually don't read. I know I am being horrible for deciding whether or not I should it, but that's how I get sometimes XD I'm not great with summaries either, so join the club.

haha I count myself lucky for giving your story a shot. Sometimes I get anal and if I don't like the layout then I wont' read it. i was extra grumpy yesterday so I didn't give it a second glance the other day but I decided to see what it was about before I judge something and glad I gave it a shot. A perfect life would be absolutely boring. I'm sure you will be seeing more comments from me :)

You're welcome :) Oh I am looking forward to it. It's just such a great story and it's pretty hard to find a good Jared story on here since I recently got into him again. It always fades in and out for me haha. I am jumping for joy at the mess that is about to get created, I am all about the mess to be honest, the lows really make the highs for the story. Maybe that is why I love the dramatic ones instead of the ones that start off really lovey dovey? Idk but yours got my attention, the power went out in my house for more than 12 hours and I had my phone still so I was checking out stories to pass the time and stumbled into yours.

I'll certainly try to touch on all those things in the next chapter! Ugh, sorry I've been so quiet lately, Uni is taking up so much of my time!

You should post them! And that story sounds really good. I'm deliberating about whether or not I should start a Motionless in White fiction.

I don't listen to 30 Seconds to Mars. So I don't think I would enjoy it too much. I'm writing a Falling in Reverse fiction. "This is Not the End". It's my baby. I love it.

And I understand what you mean. I hate when I get into a story and they aren't done or the plot is just so poorly thought out. I hate hate hate that.

What are your other Black Veil Brides stories, if you have any others.

Yeah, just as soon as I get some of my stuff updated :)

It was a really good story. And I don't think it could have ended any other way. I love what Ashley did to get CC's attention. Like I said, that was probably the best BVB fiction I have ever read. There aren't a whole lot of decent ones out there, let alone no decent ones that are CC centric. You also did a very good job at making your characters with some depth. You have no idea how many fictions I've read where the main characters are only as deep as a freaking mirror. And I commend you on that. :-D

Yay!
Well then I can't wait for the last chapter!

I'm sorry I made you cringe... and for any other times I make you cringe in the near future! Honestly, from here on out, pretty much anything can happen.

Ah! I gotta know what happens!!!!