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The twists. Ooh, do Twelve and Sands get in a fight? Ooh, or does Sands turn out to be a double agent? I doubt the latter...

Awesome! I haven't had a chance to read the update, I probably won't untilI I get around to posting my next chapter,but I can't wait to read it! (I had to make a point of replying to you though. I felt bad just leaving your comment unanswered!)

I'm going through a phase of wanting to go through and change things too. I think I've actually got a lot of contradictions strewn through out it that are easily missed but important all the same. I'm at a point where I'm going "oooh, is my next move going to be too typical... fuck, I haven't got anything else to effect the storyline though :'(" It's frustrating, but I'm working through it haha.

Ahh, fair enough. I was one of the kids who played the LOTR games before actually watching the movies. I already knew what happened so it was like 'lol, fuck the movie, let's kill some uruk-hai bitches!' Though this makes me sound like a massive gamer.Swear I'm not though. I just obsess over a few. I'll try to work out a proper story line for it just for you then! idk, I might send you the first few pages in a few weeks, to see how it's going if I'm not sure. Actually, I'm definitely not sure... but whatever haha.

Well then in that case I don't mind at all. :D

hi i hope you're having a great day, i was wondering if i could bother your for a bit? =) i have a new journal entitled "This Life's Appendix." and it would really mean the world to me if you'd read it. and comment maybe? =) thank you and please let me know if you any thoughts id love to hear 'em all =D

Yup, I know it can sometimes be irritatingly difficult to get readers :3

I'll whore it out to anyone I talk to that I think will enjoy it (: Keep up the good work!

Ahh, fair enough. I think the best thing you could add in if you want to be quick about it is a short line talking about the girls. I think that would atleast attract more readers, I know I get interested on hearing there's another killjoy in there :)

Well, the story you've got so far is sounding awesome, so I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of it :3

Cliche can be done, as long as you don't do it like everyone else does I've found. I wrote a high school fic once, which is obviously the most over used scenario for fanfiction in the history of ever. I'm not saying I'm a unique writer, but I avoided the mass amounts of angst, self pity and copious self harm everyone else fed into. It's as simple as that most of the time. I totally get trying to create a whole world. I try to do it all the time. It has effectively killed some of my stories. I just got to the point where I dropped it because I was tired of trying to keep up with myself haha.

Oooh! You're the first one to show any interest in that one! everyone else is all HIGH SCHOOL! BURLESQUE! AS LONG AS THEY FUCK I'M HAPPY! But I've had my head in Elder Scrolls land for the last few months and all I can think of is this idea I had of Imperial!Gerard arguing with a Dunmer slave in a gentlemens club and then tracking her down after her kind assault his town and kill his Breton love interest, letting the dunmer go in the process. I mean come on THEY'D HAVE SWORDS! Not drugs and detentions, not peacock feather pasties. SWORDS. and spells. Lots and lots of spells :D Have you ever played the Elder Scrolls games? I don't seem to know enough people who do! haha :3

Yeah, while it describes the world your story is set in, it doesn't quite pique interest adequately, there's not enough to make you go 'ooooh, whats this about?' which is a shame because like I said, it's a good story (I'm currently in the process of editing my rec links. takes a while thanks to the way tumblr doesn't let you do certain things with blogs that are extensions from your main account)

Well, when it comes to back story it doesn't even have to be at the beginning of the story, it'd totally put more emphasis on 12's mystery factor if you found a way to leave it until later in the story. Whatever you choose to do with it, I'm sure you'll do well at blending it into the rest of the story :)

I don't know that I could make a collection out of things that 'happened'. I'm a little nutso about things being in cannon, and if they don't fit with the rest of the story, I can't post them anywhere. But I did post parts of something I'd written that lead to The Vipers Bite! It's the very bottom story in the list shown on my profile, it's got a completely different setting and feel to the one I'm writing now.

I've got heaps of ideas too! TVB is the first thing I've posted since quitting mibba at the end of '08 but I didn't stop writing. I have a fucking massive fiction morgue with plenty of ideas that actually have direction. I know how you feel about the 'five chapters and idk where the hell i'm going'. I don't post anything untill I'm %100 sure about where it's going. I've learned that in the past, if you post it on mibba before you know what your endings going to be, it makes it a little more stressful than it should be. A lot of them aren't even related to the band either. Haha, that's one of the reasons why it's called 'fiction' ;D creative lisence? Why yes, I will HAPPILY abuse the fuck out of it! But hey, don't even worry about it, talk is good, no matter how vague :)

Yay! I love it when people comment religiously, it's seriously my favourite thing to hear what they're thinking as the story progresses. And it's easier to make friends with readers that way too :3

Thankyou for being so understanding, but the moment I send this, I'm definitely going to start reading. I finally have the timee! :D But hey, I think my subplots can be tricky, in some cases they're necessary for character development, and in others they just over complicate things. I've actually cut out sublots from this. Things that just didn't fit or were actually seriously pointless.

Yeah, I noticed that too, though I think my friend Nobody of Importance has actually written him as a human at least once. I can't recall, I haven't gone over her Killjoys fics since she finished her second one 'Destroya'. But she's actually pretty good, I reccomend her to you :)

But the videos that the guys filmed were incredibly open ended, there wasn't much more of a storyline than 'killjoys shootin' shit up in the desert, their kid companion gets nabbed by the corporate monkeys,' etc etc, until a more detailed third Killjoys video is released, or the actual comic is released it's basically open for public interperetation, which is probably my favourite thing about the whole concept. You can do literally anything with it, it's a semi painted canvas. Like I'm still getting ideas and finding different ways to look at it. To the point it's tempting to write another killjoys fic, but I really need to start prioritising a little better haha ^_^"

Well, I suppose it's not really a spoiler. x] I'm just glad to hear I'm thinking along the right path, ya know? And, of course, you're letting me know that there's eventually going to be some major shiz going down... :D - WatchesFromShadows

:D Ya know, I actually really love the pic you did of Silver Sands. Seriously. Don't bash the epic. And woaahhh bro, spoilet alert! :D But that's a good thing, cuz now I'm really, REALLY curious. - WatchesFromShadows

I didn't mind your long and many comments at all! It was totally sweet that you kept me updated on your thoughts while you read! None of my new comers have really done that yet. They'll just read up to wherever I'm at, subscribe and maaaybe comment haha. I didn't think I was so intimidating :P

I totally get how you feel about the whole 'fleshing out' process. I honestly hadn't anticipated on getting this deep into my story, but then I'm thinking "well why does this happen, what does that mean" and then I go off on a tangent trying to figure out the answer. Honestly though, i'm finding it hard to fill in gaps with how complex I've made it. When you're writing yours (which I still haven't read yet! sorry! I'll let you know when I definitley get the time/energy to) try to find a middle ground with it. Don't leave out too much, but at the same time find a way to build the idea until it becomes believable, or at least interesting. Of course I'm no good at this because I like to run around with a million things going on at once haha.

And about Korse, he's basically part of the main plot. I'm not doing any more sub plots or anything. It's got 10-15 chapters worth of life left in it and then it's finished. Idk how long that's going to take me though ^_^"

Good point. Will do!

I do believe I got your fic in my sub box! Thankyou! :D, I haven't had a chance to read it, but I may have a spare moment to do so later this evening.

Yeah, sorry about my slightly OCD habit. The entire story adds up to over 400 pages now ^_^" It's gone all full novel. Hadn't anticipated that.haha.

The sort of militant organisation came about when the Killjoys were kicked out of power by 'management'. You'll find out a little more about that later but it's all symbolic, and the naming part is supposed to be symbolic for the most part too. Adults get more say in what their name is, but anyone younger than 20 gets stuck with whatever they're given when they're signed up (unless of course they're born on base to Rebel parents) I put waaaay too much thought into this haha. ^_^"

Thankyou so much for commenting though <33

Zone 3's great! Acid rain's been letting up, and us killjoys have taken to chasing butterflies for fun, though Dobby knows where they come from in this crappy desert..

Ah! Thankyou so much! I warn you though; the rest of the story is quite lengthy and could take a couple of nights to finish ^_^"

Yay! And it's really no problemo; it's really good! ^_^

It's going to be something perfectly unexpected. I think when people read it they'll love the twisted-ness.

You know what I've read zero other killjoy stories but I know ours is gonna have one of the most twisted plots. I just think I made Sands' mouth brutal and you made the whole storyline insane! It's got to get some recognition for that!

It should be. It's well written -if I may so myself-, about a big band, and it's gonna be very interesting with tons of twists. I don't know if that makes me far too cocky but I'm just keeping it real.