Rebellion - Comments

  • freckles.

    freckles. (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    31
    Location:
    United States
    This is like an abstract painting that, if you stand too close, you see a burst of color and your think "wow! how pretty!" but you feel like you're missing something, or you're acting too thirsty, greedy, and you can't get enough, so you back away to look at the whole painting and then, BAM, you suddenly GET it. And it's a secret. Abstract art always has secrets. Only a very specific meaning to the individual reading it. I feel like you're whispering secrets to your readers and you're speaking in some sort of ancient language that we once knew how to speak but then were hauntingly reminded by catching a glimpse of a meaning or phrase and thinking, "OH! I remember that...I know that from somewhere, but where?"

    This is a beautiful poem. And I think it'll always haunt me because I'll always understand it, but I won't understand why. Damn. My vocabulary isn't large enough to describe it and record it to memory. But I want to. I really, really want to.
    January 17th, 2013 at 03:00am
  • Fly Away With Me?

    Fly Away With Me? (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    26
    Location:
    United States
    goodness me that was amazing... so many quotable lines. too many to choose from. loved it!!
    June 2nd, 2010 at 06:29am
  • Ferb Fletcher

    Ferb Fletcher (130)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    Canada
    This was just... wow. It was amazing, honestly. Such eloquence in your wording. The entire thing was truly a sight to behold and a true feast for the mind. Excellently written!
    May 22nd, 2010 at 01:50am
  • amidst reality.

    amidst reality. (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    Australia
    If only I could elaborate on how many lines just fit so well in that poem. 'I shall rock this heartless / No not nation, for rhyming obeys constraints but this line overfills and breaks the rules.'
    That line is one that I absolutely adore =)
    Brilliant work.
    March 14th, 2010 at 02:18am
  • vividly.alive

    vividly.alive (110)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    32
    Location:
    Canada
    This was beyond beautiful. I wish I could write poetry like you. I think one of my favourite lines was

    [i]Skinny bones that let you roam from Rome to Rome
    And back again my friend.[/i]

    But then again there were a lot that stood out to me. Wonderful job!
    March 9th, 2010 at 10:48pm
  • phantomatthewindow

    phantomatthewindow (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    29
    Location:
    United States
    wow, that was amazing. i loved how it sounded on my tongue, you balanced the rhyming perfectly and it flowed like a waterfall. i loved it. lol, if the rest of the people write like you, it'll be really hard to choose a winner. bravo!
    February 17th, 2010 at 04:03am
  • roxsoxx

    roxsoxx (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Location:
    United States
    Dang this is gooooood :)
    February 16th, 2010 at 07:47am
  • CheckYesLindsey94

    CheckYesLindsey94 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Very long, but it was worth it! :]
    January 14th, 2010 at 02:42am