Rebellion - Comments

This is like an abstract painting that, if you stand too close, you see a burst of color and your think "wow! how pretty!" but you feel like you're missing something, or you're acting too thirsty, greedy, and you can't get enough, so you back away to look at the whole painting and then, BAM, you suddenly GET it. And it's a secret. Abstract art always has secrets. Only a very specific meaning to the individual reading it. I feel like you're whispering secrets to your readers and you're speaking in some sort of ancient language that we once knew how to speak but then were hauntingly reminded by catching a glimpse of a meaning or phrase and thinking, "OH! I remember that...I know that from somewhere, but where?"

This is a beautiful poem. And I think it'll always haunt me because I'll always understand it, but I won't understand why. Damn. My vocabulary isn't large enough to describe it and record it to memory. But I want to. I really, really want to.

goodness me that was amazing... so many quotable lines. too many to choose from. loved it!!

This was just... wow. It was amazing, honestly. Such eloquence in your wording. The entire thing was truly a sight to behold and a true feast for the mind. Excellently written!

If only I could elaborate on how many lines just fit so well in that poem. 'I shall rock this heartless / No not nation, for rhyming obeys constraints but this line overfills and breaks the rules.'
That line is one that I absolutely adore =)
Brilliant work.

This was beyond beautiful. I wish I could write poetry like you. I think one of my favourite lines was

[i]Skinny bones that let you roam from Rome to Rome
And back again my friend.[/i]

But then again there were a lot that stood out to me. Wonderful job!

wow, that was amazing. i loved how it sounded on my tongue, you balanced the rhyming perfectly and it flowed like a waterfall. i loved it. lol, if the rest of the people write like you, it'll be really hard to choose a winner. bravo!

Dang this is gooooood :)

Very long, but it was worth it! :]