I understand the poem, but could I suggest proper grammar and asome puncuation and spacing. I think that would make the poem much more pleasent to read.
Other than that, the poem is short and nice. I really like "and I couldn't hold" and downwards, for the 5 lines or so. Well done.
Other than that, the poem is short and nice. I really like "and I couldn't hold" and downwards, for the 5 lines or so. Well done.