Out of Reach - Comments

Good repetition, I really liked that. And the idea of the whole thing? Fantastic.

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[b]What I like:[/b]
-I could easily see this as an acoustic song.
-It was well put together.
-&& Definitely fit in the category of lyrics.

[b]What I don't like:[/b]
-Well, I don't quite understand the chorus of this. How does a fish bowl correspond with this? Maybe I'm not thinking on a deeper level. I don't know. It just doesn't seem to make sense to me

Other than that, this is my favorite of all the lyrics you submitted(:

-Lynnete(=

This is amazing! I love the whole 'swimming in a goldfish bowl' line. Totally awesome(:

this is beautiful!!! i can connect with it in so many ways!!! this is lovely writing.

- The Phoenix Queen <3<3<3

This is really good . Excelent writing . [=

Hmmm. I like the details in the stanza's, and the "goldfish repetition" was lovely. Thank you for posting this :)