Different (I Am Me and You Are You) - Comments

This is amazing <333 I love how you match one thing with the opposite and yet you added so smuttiness in between :). I love the Ying Yang part and every opposite I read, Ying and Yang came to mind. I love the below and top one given I have that 'dirty' mind xD

I think the cute little simple rhymes at the beginning are great and really just set the whole thing off. It's an interest concept and I like how you have a varied way of doing your comparisons/metaphors instead of keeping to the same pattern.

There are a few mistakes with lack of apostrophes in "I'm" and "your" instead of "you're". But it didn't take away from the poem, which is a good sign, I think.

I also think the title is great, how you fused two titles together. I love it when that's pulled off well.

I really love the way you write

Woah, dude. Philosophy at its best. I loved the meaning in this. And the first four lines were perfect in getting peoples attention. It was awesome

Well. The few things I've noticed in a few of your poems but haven't said already is that you say 'your' instead of 'you're'. It can easily be skimmed over, but it's something you'd probably want to be aware of. "I'm the wind flowing shapeless
[You're] the earth solid and still" And here, without the comma or a semi-colon, the word 'shapeless' doesn't work. I'm just being nit-picky which is a good thing since you have a good flow with your words and such. In this context, it would have to have been "shapelessly". I think it's just the lack of commas, semi-colons, and periods that's really the problem here. Otherwise it was a good poem!