The Strong Fall - Comments

Your emotion in this poem is really strong but I think the flow could use a little work. I think if you broke up some of the lines into two lines it would make your poem much smoother to read. Try reading it out loud, that may also help you to find where the poem's rhythm is a little off.
Other than that though I think your poem is great and intense, good writing!

I like the idea and emotion behind this, it helps paint the poems image into your mind.
However, I think some of your sentences should be split up and put into different lines as layout can affect a poem as well. Also, while I liked your use of vocabulary in this poem I think it could be spiced up a little bit especially since you use the word fall quiet a bit. You can use a thesaurus to help. Just type it in to Google :)
I did enjoy the poem though and found it interesting so good job :)