Your Silence. - Comments

I adore this poem. It really speaks.
Good job, Jess. :]

I love the length of each line, i never bother to read loong lined poems, i kind of think how yuve done the short lines actually compliments the emotion, it relly brilliant, i love how simple the language is yet it has so much meaning, relly excellent, my favriot would have to be :
You lied to me,
I lied to me,
We lied to us
i just find thouse lines apsalootly amazingly powerful, brilliant poem relly good job, seriously well done

I like how this poem never straight-up states what is going on; the reader is left to wonder; but it still conveys the emotion well. I especially like the third stanza, the use of repetition and parallelism in the words.

I like the form, too; the use of the short lines, all in quatrains. The short lines make the poem read choppy--but not in a bad way, and it's obvious that the choppiness is deliberate (which is good, because when the choppiness isn't deliberate it can seem sloppy). It makes the way the poem reads fit the mood and context very well.

The pain in this poem is pretty obvious but it kind of has a longing feeling to it as well. Like why did this person hurt you? Why did they lie and leave? Longing probably isn't the right word to describe this. Wistful possibly but definitely hurt. It's great poem that's written very nicely. Even if it does deal with being hurt. I'm glad I got to read this though I do apologize if the comment isn't very good. It's hard to be detailed with great writing. Half the time I really have no idea what to say. You're an excellent writer but I do hope this pain goes away.