Moonlight - Comments

Very wonderful flow, and I like how this poem doesn't make sex seem like taboo.

That was perfect! It flowed well, the images were vivid and your words were chosen just right. Just amazing!

This is beautiful. It really doesn't take away from the innocence that sex can actually carry. And I think you worded everything beautifully. I like how you use the moonlight to travel from one part of the body to another. This poem flows beautifully. Good job!

This poem is very beautiful. The style and the way you write is brilliant. The title kind of pulled me in, but as I was reading I realized it really wasn't about moonlight. I love the way you make it so.

The style here is perfections. It's a flow that's a disjointed type almost but still runs together. I like the title of the poem being the main IMAGERY and not the main subject.

This also reads as.. Secretly sexy, lol. Not like a virgin making love for the first time, but a couple in love making love together.. An intimate experience that's so personal and close to th heart but its also undeniably sex, and I like that you include that. A lot of people separate sex and making love, but making love is sex, just a type of it and you've illustrated that wonderfully.

Speaking of illustrations, yours give me chills almost. It's so.. [i]real[/i]. It's not just comparisons and fancy words but the reality of what's happening. It keeps you centered but you still take the reader into a poetic world. And I love the ending. Ashamed, but unashamed at the same time. A beautiful ending to a beautiful poem.

I love this newer version of Moonlight. Not that I didn't love the first version--I did. But this one flows so much better.