Olympus Defeated - Comments

I'm totally into greek mythology at the moment, which was why I chose to comment on this. I don't read poems often (English at school ruined them for me), but this really is fab. Like spacejunkie said, the fact that you've chosen to write about the emotion, but do it in a way that is pretty unique is what makes this poem so great. Your language is really good, and unlike a few of the things I've seen on mibba poem-wise, everything flows really well. You tell a better story in this one poem than most people could tell in a ten-chapter story, so really well done! :)

I chose to comment on this poem because it’s my favourite of yours. I really like the idea that you’re getting at your chosen emotion through a larger theme. That adds a layer of depth, I think. It’s also, in my view, one of your best executed poems. Nothing here is cheesy, easy or superfluous. You have the exact right number of lines, and each one is quality, which makes it like a bouquet.

I particularly enjoyed the allusions to ‘mortal Zeus’ and the hint that there may be one further level of metaphor here- perhaps this theme has been chosen to reflect the personality of somebody real?

Anyway, it’s a nice poem, so well done.

Ahh, this is so pretty. Your use of imagery is just amazing - I can't even describe it. I'm speechless. Anybody who says anything different is clearly insane, because your poems are just beautiful through and through. You should totally get published someday. <3

I'm highly in love with Greek Mythology and I agree one hundred percent with animal soup ...I honestly don't know what else to say to this. I don't even think there should be any constructive criticism for you on any of your poems because you word it all so beautifully that I just can't find a flaw.

I absolutely love Greek mythology and it is so hard to find a decent, as well as accurate, poem about it! This is just brilliant. You tell such a powerful story and convey such emotion with your words. My favorite line would have to be "let the heavens tumble from my shoulders..." I really, really enjoyed reading this!

I actually tried to comment on this the other night, I guess it just didn't submit it.

I think in a blog that you mentioned you don't write much poetry, if I recall correctly. You really should write more, this is really amazing and I can't pick out anything wrong with it. My favorite lines would have to be Are for prayers that fall on/The deaf ears of a mortal Zeus. I don't honestly know what it is about it that draws me to it.

I'm actually very shocked this doesn't have more comments, just like with your other poem. You've done an excellent job making it flow without it sounding choppy, if that makes sense.