The Rabbit - Comments

  • fen'harel

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    This is a very gripping poem. You portrayed paranoia very accurately, how you have that constant fear of being followed, targeted, watched. I especially liked how you focus only on the rabbit feeling in constant danger to the point of it completely ignoring anything else surrounding it. Danger at every corner, but all the rabbit can focus on is the fox.

    You are very talented (I kind of stalked throughout all your poems and this one is my favorite one Shifty) and I will obviously recommend your writing.
    June 27th, 2013 at 07:52pm
  • carousels;

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    This was a beautiful poem. Your imagery is beautiful, and it gave me chills as I read it. The layout sets the tone perfectly, and the stanzas are spaced separated perfectly as well. The last stanza was amazing, and you have an amazing talent. This was a beautifully written free-verse poem. :)
    October 12th, 2012 at 02:00am
  • warmaiden

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    I can't stop clicking on the 'My Five Emotions' contest that you have written this for. I wonder how I have never stumbled across any of your poems because they are full of imagery that is hard to find and understand
    August 8th, 2012 at 01:11am
  • daughter

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    Wow, this one is stellar too. I can feel the anxiety in the pit of my stomach as I'm reading this and wondering all the same things, too. The imagery you used is absolutely vivid without saying too much. You seem to be very good at giving a reader just enough description while still leaving a bit to the imagination.

    I'm in love with the second and last stanzas. You're waaay too good at this.
    July 27th, 2012 at 04:15am
  • jewelia.

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    I really like this one--a lot. I've never really thought about how many chances, how many moments there could be where prey could be attacked by a predator. Paranoia in animals is something I haven't really recognized before. The description, as always, is amazing. I love the second stanza especially. Great job!
    July 27th, 2012 at 03:54am
  • Eimie

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    Another great poem, the layout sets the mood very nicely, great obvious suspense in it.
    July 20th, 2012 at 03:18pm
  • So Mi Shught

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    Woah.

    The description is perfect. The transition of the stanzas help build suspense.

    It's also an interesting view. I've never before thought about how prey would feel about a predator, much less put that into words.

    Excellent.
    June 21st, 2012 at 08:41am