Take This in Case of Emergency in the Bathroom. - Comments

@ braineater.
Thank you for the criticism! I'll re-write it soon and post the revised version.

I like your writing style and the theme you have going here.

However, the rhyme scheme almost ruins the integrity of the piece. The lines seem to bumble along to the rhyming syllable instead of forming a cohesive statement. Perhaps you could consider re-writing it as a free verse poem to give yourself more liberties with the structure and word choice.

Overall though, I do like this poem and think it would be great with a few minor tweaks. Good job!