April 10th, 2013 at 01:29am
i found your blog, promoting your things, and considered i'm not educated about supernatural at all, i decided to look at your poems.
the mood, or tone, in this poem is what is probably throwing the poem off for me. it seems contradictory, two different moods being put into one, without any coherent transition or conclusion that links both of those moods.
maybe, it's that i can't relate to your poem all that well, but i can't analyze it, based on anything, and for me, that makes it lack a sort of say, glossy shine that makes it appealing. i'm sure others would disagree and like it, however.
I actually totally agree with you to be honest, this was something that I kind off threw together just to take a break from my stories but now that I've read it over again I get what you're saying !