I was pleased to read your poem. It was short, sweet, yet to the point. As a reader I felt that the ending almost wasn't an ending, I had to read ot over again because honestly I was expecting more. Of course this is my own view. Other that that I would advise you to break it up into smaller stanzas, that might help readers follow along and get the impact you desire. Overall I thought you did a fine job, your spelling was excellent, and you didn't force your rhymes.
I was pleased to read your poem. It was short, sweet, yet to the point. As a reader I felt that the ending almost wasn't an ending, I had to read ot over again because honestly I was expecting more. Of course this is my own view. Other that that I would advise you to break it up into smaller stanzas, that might help readers follow along and get the impact you desire. Overall I thought you did a fine job, your spelling was excellent, and you didn't force your rhymes.
Please keep writing.")
-Rosi