The Last Lover - Comments

  • I think the poem is both lovely and enchanting. The words you've chosen were very easy-going so I suggest you expand your vocabulary and use other words that can make your poem better.

    I thought that there was a small grammatical error:

    to kiss your forehead/that makes you blush. It was kind of a run-on sentence which makes readers think that the forehead makes the person blush.

    I adore that kind of format, it makes the poem seem like a narrative and it gives a good vibe to the readers.
    June 4th, 2013 at 08:03am