October 4th, 2013 at 10:32pm
@ Lucy; Nyu; Hina
thank you for the comment and I'm glad that you liked the poem :)
it was sort of cliche to have her husband die, but honestly there would't have been change if he didn't. The original thought was for him to leave and choose to never come back, sort of leaving her hanging on the platform; but then again, there still wouldn't really be a change... oh well, lol. I'll just have to use that idea another time.
I'm really happy that you like my poem, although it is centered around a topic that you don't normally like.
It's very interesting that you picked up on the word "navy" as there were five other words purposefully repeated throughout the poem. "Navy" was meant to be used a foreboding, almost even a melancholy symbol. It does kind of give off a sense of security and strength, though.