These Quiet Dreams and I - Comments

Ariveria, You constantly amaze me with your pieces. It's been far too long since I've read anything by you and again I'm swept away into the worlds you paint with words, I get lost in the emotions that you whisper to my heart and soul, and I'm entranced by the things you show. This piece is simply amazing! Personally, I think the title fits the piece well. I can only hope you take opportunities to share your gift with others (get published, girl!).
~Keep Writing

Wow, this was honestly an amazing poem! I need to stalk the poem section of mibba more often, but I'm kinda... too lazy XD Anyway, I was looking through the blog section and saw you wanted people to read your poem, and here I am!

You have amazing description. It flowed beautifully and felt almost... tranquil, just reading it. So yeah, you definitely have a recommendation from me! It was really an amazing poem, and I have no qualms with telling you so! It sucks that no one can get any readers or comments on anything on mibba >_< Great job though, and I definitely encourage you to keep writing poetry like this!

I'm terrible with poetry, but I love to read it. I think the name is a little obvious, I would probably go for something a little more abstract. I don't really have any examples. "Slipping Silently"

I love the second and last stanza of this poem. I got chills. I love how you strung "A soft, painted twilight/with a dawn-blue kiss" together. It's a total paradox, but it's gorgeous. "Spiralling sight" was another paradox that I love in this poem. Great work. :)

I'm not too good with title names either, but to get it shorter you could do Dreaming Silently or just Quiet Dreams. Or leave as is, but it isn't all that long. I don't see anything wrong with it.

I loved this poem. One of my favorite pair of lines was:
"A soft, painted twilight
With a dawn-blue kiss."
It's just so beautiful. Every stanza of yours has that dream-esque feel to it.