Drug Induced Psychosis - Comments

Thank you, I was worried I may be criticized for the choppy stanza's, it's a relief that you both got it :)

Thank you, I was worried I may be criticized for the choppy stanza's, it's a relief that you both got it :)

I'm also here as a judge for the Magazine contest!

Your rhyme scheme is very erratic and different for every stanza, but I really like that because it seems to allow the reader into the mind of the narrator a little more - it adds to this idea that Formaldehyde. flagged up about the line structure adding to the overall mindset of the character and his downward spiral into what seems like madness.

You've got this really dark tone to the entire poem and I love that. You've not gone overboard with the description to achieve that either, which is really great. There's a natural sort of flow to the poem that just seems to keep me reading too, which combined with the description creates - or at least for me - this hard-hitting piece of work that really does have deliciously evil undertones to it.

I think you've done a great job of showing the character in a really good light and in a wonderful way. Great job!

*Mibba Magazine Contest*

I really like your title for this poem! It's a great description of the poem as a whole, one that intrigues the reader into, well, reading it!

Your word choice is wonderful; an absolute delight to see. You have a great way of mixing the ordinary with something a little darker, more dangerous, to create a piece of work that resonates after you've read it.

I enjoyed how at the start of the poem the lines are longer and more descriptive, and by the end they are shorter and to the point. It's a good way to convey how the character's emotions and mindset changes.

Overall, great job!