I honestly have to congratulate you for the imagery in this one and themes you used about the different persons the narrator's friend met. I really liked how this wasn't about the narrator but from a person who watched that girl POV. You really did a wonderful job and I'm amazed this has no comments at all. It's a shame, really,because this is grand.
I am honestly lost in this one. I don't know what to point out 'cause I find it excellent. I like how each stanza has five lines of the same length, and each stanza ends with a sixth line which repeats the same thing; ''good''. It shows how much you thought of this while you wrote it and how much you wanted to emphasize the poem's title in the poem itself.
The watcher slowly describes to us how that girl is and how she was at first, before going on about the people she met and what she did while that person was watching everything, and even tries singing those songs of hers.
It was like the watcher wanted to do everything that girl did but he/she couldn't by himself, hence the last line is ''Because god knows I never could.''
You wrote this perfectly and brought it home. Congratz for this piece of yours.
I am honestly lost in this one. I don't know what to point out 'cause I find it excellent. I like how each stanza has five lines of the same length, and each stanza ends with a sixth line which repeats the same thing; ''good''. It shows how much you thought of this while you wrote it and how much you wanted to emphasize the poem's title in the poem itself.
The watcher slowly describes to us how that girl is and how she was at first, before going on about the people she met and what she did while that person was watching everything, and even tries singing those songs of hers.
It was like the watcher wanted to do everything that girl did but he/she couldn't by himself, hence the last line is
''Because god knows I never could.''
You wrote this perfectly and brought it home. Congratz for this piece of yours.
-Maria. :)