Twenty Twelve. - Comments

  • Green.Day1333

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    wow..that's amazing.
    I actually almost started to cry.
    you're an incredible writer.
    May 5th, 2008 at 06:16am
  • Pseudonym

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    I like it. Lots of metaphors and imagery, and good rhythm :)
    one teeny suggestion...I think it would be good if you put the last word of each stanza on a separate line, to sort of add emphasis.
    I love the repeated stanza, nice and powerful :P
    April 30th, 2008 at 07:26pm
  • Veronikkkkaa

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    this is really cool.
    i like it.
    you're really good.
    April 30th, 2008 at 06:20am