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  • LiSwtSLaS

    LiSwtSLaS (100)

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    It's a wonderful metaphor to show the story of something else. lol deep! two things I'll bug you about today.

    "beautiful as it as, i chose to ignore his music."

    Beautiful as it "was" perhaps?


    "There was nothing to me in the apartment but me"

    um..... one sec, ahhh yes. "There was nothing with me in the apartment but me"? Or something like that. Now...... write more?
    July 6th, 2008 at 03:16am
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