June 22nd, 2007 at 09:47pm
Not that the rest of your poem isn't good, but how you ended this one was really GOOD! I loved the ending! Where do you get it from? *lol* You always write good poems but then you like totally nail it with the closing lines. Amazing, go you ^_^
[i]Sweet lies to distract betray and detract[/i]
That line pretty much...wow. It was amazing.
The metaphores stand out so much.
There were a few lines that sort of threw me off, because there were a few grammatical errors. But I wasn't paying too much attention to that, as I was paying attention to how amazing this was.