Excuse Me Dear (Revised for Midterm)

Excuse me Dear
Im sorry
Please forgive me for what I've done.

It was so great.
So rich. So tasty.
The dark creamy texture.
The light brown foam creating swirls with each sip.
I could feel the electricity flowing within my veins,
I felt so Alive.

I drank all of your coffee.
Such a sweet delightful smell.
So mouth watering. I've got none left.
You've got to get more.
Im so sorry I forgot.
Such a delicious mistake.
But I couldn't go to the store.

Rebecca Stewart
ּבקי סטיוארט

which one do you think is better?