The Sea
Life was a sea,
Vast and lonely,
On the sixteenth of May,
As the sea of loneliness met a new,
A sea of happiness grew,
A new sea, warm and pleasant,
Yet not as pleasant as you,
The waves crash on the beach,
Your soothing voice speaks,
The ocean, a majestic blue,
Yet not as beautiful as you,
Lost at sea for a month,
Yet not as lost as before.
Vast and lonely,
On the sixteenth of May,
As the sea of loneliness met a new,
A sea of happiness grew,
A new sea, warm and pleasant,
Yet not as pleasant as you,
The waves crash on the beach,
Your soothing voice speaks,
The ocean, a majestic blue,
Yet not as beautiful as you,
Lost at sea for a month,
Yet not as lost as before.
♠ ♠ ♠
This is the revised version of the poem I posted earlier in the week. I wrote this for my boyfriend and my one month anniversary and would love feedback and ways to improve. Our anniversary is tomorrow so help is needed urgently. Thanks :)